The confirmation

The confirmation

1. What is my thesis?

My persuasive argument thesis is:

We should focus on bully's psychology first to resolve school violence.

2. What types of source am I using to defend my thesis?

I am using reliable academic reports, statistics and articles.

3. Are my arguments mostly based on evidence, logic or emotion?

I should change my last arguments about limitation of current regulations.

My confirmation.

Psychological features of adolescents influence and cause school violence. According to my research, I pick specific features like depression, superiority and lack of empathy and these three things can cause violence. Students who have a depression which is caused by social, physical changes and environments feel gloomy and behave aggressively and sensitively. -According to Research of Seoul National University Hospital, 22% of high school students in Korea have severe depression, which is the highest proportion than ordinary persons and university students. Also it can be carried over into anti-social behaviors, anxiety disorder and behavioral disturbance.

In addition, Adolescents usually want to show off their power by bullying others and dominating. One way to show off their power is to make a group that is threatening. -Actually there are 464 groups in Korean schools.

According to one research, when they studied attacker's brain they found that activity of hippocampus and amygdaloid nucleus that recognize the pain of others is remarkably low. These are just a few psychological features and there will be much more. Therefore, we should focus on these things to grasp real causes of bullies and change their attitudes.

Effects of environments also influence adolescents psychologically and then cause school violence. If parents are aggressive and overcontrol their children, they can assume a defiant attitude. And if parents are be overprotective of their children, they can be self-centered and selfish. When parents have inconsistant child-rearing attitude and are lack of understanding and care, it can affect them poorly. (For example, economic difficulty, lack of support.) Moreover, the breakdown of a family like divorce can influence adolescents self -formation negatively. For example, proportion of teen-age deviations is increasing hugely. Also, family[domestic] violence can cause adjustment, behavioral ,nerve and mental disorder.

How permissive the society is can determine how member of society are exposed to violence. These days, because of development of information and communications, mass media, students can be exposed to unhealthy materials more easily. Also, as commercial viability caused by competition between medias make materials more arousing, it can give students effects more badly and hugely. Harmful environments also can reinforce bad behaviors.

Students stress out excessive education system that focuses only on college entrance exams. (according to statistics their stress recognition rate are 69%.) Lack of chances of avocation and self-improvement make this situation more serious. Therefore we should focus on bullies from the perspective of their environments which make them attackers and specific causes to do bullying.

Lastly, punishments has no power to resolve school violence. Lots of regulations which are focused on punishments are less effective. (For example, reconciliation programs can make meaningful changes. - 2012 actual case of school violence.) Actually, as a part of punishment teachers remain history of violence in student record and it is a shattering blow to attacker's life. However, these punishments are unilateral actions and not educations for attackers. Therefore, they do not know what their faults are and get more crooked ,resentful. It can cause another violence cases and they will remain as criminals till they grow up. We should change "punishment" as a "recovery".